中国雅思考生写作实战血泪史

发表于:2014-11-25 18:02 [只看楼主] [划词开启]
上了张驰新的写作课,感觉这老师讲的不错,少了没营养的吹水,干货很多。
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以下为搬运内容(小新老师的公众号,对不起了)。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。 


写作考试如果不批改,等于皇帝的新衣。你以为穿了,其实还是在裸考。我在小新工作室专门负责写作批改和一对一讲评,至今我已经批改了305篇小作文和218篇大作文,总共对32位烤鸭进行了192小时的一对一讲评。如果你还没有在语法上爱过痛过,今天保证你痛得死去活来!

下面每个例子都有错误,学霸们可以来尝试指出我例子中所有的错误。

写作常见错误汇总

1. 小作文主语问题

The percentage of resources and furniture and equipment both were the instrument of annual spending at 15%.

In 1995, the number of local covered a majority of total telephone calls with about 72 billion and that kept the first from 1995 to 2002.

2. 时态问题

A report published last year suggested that more than 65% children in ask their parents to buy some toys, but only played once or twice, for a simple reason that such toy has been shown on TV.

3. 介词使用错误

Moreover, compared to other aspects, investment in education may receive the most effects to our world in the long-term.

On the other hand, the free-education may create a heavy burden for the government.

4. 单复数错误

And the main reason could be divided into 2 categories which are physical and mental.

For example, the hard news, sport news, soft news and health express has all played very significant role in our regular lives.

Second, the development of technology improve the efficiency of the whole society which bring people large financial profits.

5. 冠词使用错误

In terms of the mental reasons, we can see it clearly that shopping is a excellent approach to…

With that in mind, only when other necessaries for living has become a urgent needs, should government do everything they canto create opportunities for people to attend schools.

6. 主从句不一致

Such phenomenon has been witnessed by a survey commissioned last year, which contains a number of revealing insights into the motivation for employees to stay at the job.

7. 语序错误

And more important, through shopping, we can totally feel satisfaction that we will be happy and full of motivation.

Therefore, the accountant is real the beneficiary of the computer technology which brings them much convenience.

8. 并列成分不一致

Under such circumstances, government should make all efforts to drive economic development and living standard.


9. 定语从句连词选择问题

So we could develop more scientific planting patterns that farmers would grow cereal much healthier and tastier.

Books are the most efficient way to spread technology and culture in the rural areas where have undeveloped economy.

10. 谓语动词不唯一问题

What’s more, sometimes people crazy about one brand of products just because their herd mentality.

First off, modern technology such as chemical fertilizers and machinery, provide people cheaper food, has improved the quality of people’s lives remarkably.

11. 主被动问题

In conclusion, it is clear that the cost of teachers’ salaries was giving full play while the other options during the 2 decades.

Comparing with natural food, crops which planted with chemical fertilizer would have less nutrition and taste to some extent.

12. 词性问题

…excellent approach to release our stress and upset

crops which are planted with chemical fertilizer would have less nutrition and taste to some extent.

13. 连贯性问题

The government should first improve the policemen’s proficiency of handling the on-the-spot crimes and emergencies by allocating more revenue to the social security agency, and giving them a better training or moral education.

14. 强调句使用错误

It is food and water supply in some rural areas that may have a more important priority, rather than the education needs.

15. 词语选择问题

The government and the society should create more job opportunities and encourage young people to establish their own business by providing financial support to them.

In order to make a fortune in a short time, some of them will do illegal thing such as theft and robbery because of the deficiency of legislated awareness.

Then some reform should be made to encourage the students to complete their studies and decrease the dropout rate.

Conceived as a mentor or facilitator, they should remind their students of being cheated.

That is the biggest drivers of the government to avoid all the questionable contentviewed by the young.

16. 动词搭配问题

Meanwhile, supported by knowledge, theywill grasp a better understanding of the society and avoid to go astray or commit crimes.

 


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