【7步助你攻克四六级】段落写作作业点评(by David老师)~

发表于:2017-12-12 16:56 [只看楼主] [划词开启]

上期的段落写作练习不知道大家做得是否过瘾呢?

原帖可戳:【7步助你攻克四六级】段落写作其实很简单~

今天词场君特地将英语教研David老师的点评指导整理给大家看,希望大家都能有所收获喔!

    With the graduation time coming, most of collage students have been facing what to do and how to do it all the time. Obviously my option is having a bussiness of my own with finding a good job difficultly.

    Firstly It is no obvious advantage when in the same company you interview metting some one who has diploma at the same with your.


     If given two options after graduation, that is, to find a job somewhere or to go to start a business of your own. I’d choose the first.

    Above all I think it’s too difficult to graduation students to go to start a business theirselves. Because of the shortage in money and social experience. Therefore, I think it’s more secure to find a job somewhere. In the second place, I think we can study something like social experience and skills from others what we can’t gatn in campus. After gathering wnogh experience that you can choose to go to start a business of your own. The social is so competitive, that you can hardly start a business of your own.

    Summarizing the above views, I would choose to find a job somewhere after graduation.

    The increase number of college graduates has tigerred a controversy issue as to the options after graduation. views on the topic vary greatly among people have different walks of life,among which there is a prevaling voice: the best options for graduates is to take a job in a company directly after graduation.

    I would prefer finding a job after graduation for the following reasons. First and foremost, it is much easier for me to find a job compared with staring a business. As a green hand just graduated from a college.i have adequate ability to face the complex situation.Furthermore, it benefits the entire society for students to start working in a company. And it can develop my perseverance.     Last but not least, it will help me prepare my start my own business.

    From my perspective, it is crucial that college graduation should find a job first to make ourselves more experiences. Only in this way can we achieve success more fast

    It's time, at last, to speak the truth about attend college at abroad, and the truth is this thinking that learning abroad is more benefical than learning at home is really not such an unnecessary thinking, and I totally disagree with it.

    First of all, the development education of out country is increasing now, which mean that the level of our college education as high as the level of the college abroad gradually. Secondly, there is no denying that cultural differences decides on educational differences so that it is not easy for students to ??? to the loose education environment in foreign countries. The last but the most fundamental reason is that studing abroad needs a lot of mony which many family con’t afford.

    Therefore, I hold the view that it is not a good choice for many people in work-holding family attend college aborad.

Finding a job first

    College students' options upon graduation vary from person to person.Some graduates make a choice to find a job while others prefer to start their own business.As for, I am favor of the former.

    The are several reasons accounting for why I choose the first choice.First and foremost,it is much easier for me to hunt for a job compared with setting to my own business which demands funds,experience and market.As a green hand who has just graduated from college,it is thoroughly beyond my competence to bank on such a complexioned situation.Secondly,working for others could developmy personalities such as perseverance and stress tolerance,which can help me become more prepared and qualified if I would like to start my own business later.

    To conclude,chances always favor those who are prepared.And I don't think a person could really build up

    Finding jobs is the problem that everyone has to meet when they graduate from university. With the increasing difficulty of finding jobs for graduates, this problem becomes more and more serious. So, there are more and more people start to run a company. Actually, running a company has many advertages.

    First of all, running a company can release the employment stress. From the general aspect, the more students run companies, the less stress of employment pressure will be. As a part of students can solve their employment problem by themselves, the society will have fewer students to take up the limited positions. From personal aspect, if a student can solve their problem by running a company, he doesn’t need to stand the stress from finding no jobs.

    Secondly, running a company can help student grow up quickly. Nowadays, graduates are very pure in school. They don’t experience too much before they enter the society. However, they must experience a lot when running companies. Most of those things are not learned in school. And that can help them grow up quickly. It is good for them.

    To sum up, running a company has many advantages. It is not only benefiting for students themselves, but also for the society. I think our society should encourage students running companies.

 

 

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